केही हाइकुहरु
सुस्मा मानन्धर
रहर
बुढेसकालमा
तरुनी स्वास्नी
यारचागुम्बा ।
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बैस
निस्ठुरी ,निर्मोही
एकपल्ट गएपछि
फेरि फर्कंदैन ।
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प्रेम
पहिलो नजरमै
मिठो काउकुती
दुबैको मन चन्चल ।
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दुरसन्चार
हेल्लो,हेल्लो
नेट्वर्क बिजी
संपर्क हुन सकेन।
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परिवर्तन
जन आन्दोलन
आ आफ्नो स्वार्थ
न्यास्रो नेपाल ।
mdhsusma@yahoo.com
Hi Susmaji,
I have read your
Hi Susmaji,
I have read your Haiku.Now you have cheanged your writing style. Very nice your attempt.
jivan
“बुढेसकालमा तरुनी स्वास्नी-
“बुढेसकालमा तरुनी स्वास्नी- यारचागुम्बा ।”
Yo chahi man paryo hai Sushmaa jee.
बुढेसकालमा तरुनी स्वास्नी,
बुढेसकालमा तरुनी स्वास्नी, यारचागुम्बा ।
I liked this Sushma jee.
vab ekdam ramro chha tara
vab ekdam ramro chha tara haikoo ko niyam vitra chhaina
sunil
vab ekdam ramro chha tara
vab ekdam ramro chha tara haikoo ko niyam ma chhaina
Sushma jee,
Thank you for the
Sushma jee,
Thank you for the nice verses. But do they all fall into the category of HAIKU? As far as I know, haiku should have 5, 7, 5 letters. Or do they fall in some special class of haiku? If general rule is followed, then it would generate great haikus.
very good haiku i must adore
very good haiku i must adore ur capability
tara kunai kunai ma sabdasanrachana bigreko jasto lagyo
sarai ramro chaa keep it up
ananta lamichhane
comment gari dinu hune sabai
comment gari dinu hune sabai mitraharu prati abhari chhu.tapaiharule dinu bhayeko samay ra sujhabko lagi dherai dherai dhanyabad.5-7-5 ko paridhibhitra mero pachhillo haiku ra arko gazal rakheki chhu,apeksya chha,puna sujhabharuko,
thank u.
दुरसन्चार
हेल्लो,हेल्लो
नेट्व
दुरसन्चार
हेल्लो,हेल्लो
नेट्वर्क बिजी
संपर्क हुन सकेन।
Yo waala chai khatara cha
Suama ji
aati nai ramro lagyo
Suama ji
aati nai ramro lagyo
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NO ATTENTION
JUST
NO WORK
NO ATTENTION
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